Проверьте правильность исполнения задания и поправьте пожалуйста если есть ошибки! Correct

Проверьте корректность исполненья задания и поправьте пожалуйста если есть оплошности!
Correct the mistakes.

1. Its a cake in the cupboard if youre hungry.
It's cake in the cupboard if you're hungry.

2. She rings he every evening.
She rings him every evening.
3. This is a great toy. Do you want to play with this?
This is a great toy. You want to play with that?
4. Theres almost ten oclock. Lets go.
It's almost ten o'clock. Lets go.
5. Do you want to try some cake? There is really delicious.
Do you want to try the cake? It's really delicious.
6. Your hair it is full of sand from the beach.
Your hair is full of sand from the beach.
7. Jane she arrived at school late today.
Jane she arrived came to school late today.
8. Will you come and visit we soon?
Will you come and visit us soon?
9. Someone is knocking at the door. I think he is Henry.
Someone's knocking on the door. I think he's Henry.
10. It is a book about dogs on the shelf.
This is a book about the dogs of the shelf.
11. I have a lot of pens. Choose it.
I have a lot of pens. To choose it.
12. Do you like my new watch? I bought one yesterday.
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