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Hello!
I am writing to you from Los-Angeles which is warm and wet. Los-Angeles is very beautiful city. I will never forget it. The weather is hot and sunny. We lay in the sun.
In Los Angeles I went to Hollywood. There I have met a lot of movie stars and one of them was Will Smith.
Also I went to Griffith Park. Its a biggest park in this city. There I saw a lot of flowers and trees. They were very beautiful.
I was in the Huntington Library. There were a lot of interesting books, and I read "The Birds Of America", "The Tragical History of Hamlet, Prince of Denmark" and other.
I took some pictures of Los-Angeles. It's a real city of Angels.
Bye,
Dima