Проверьте пожалуйста!! Грамматику и лексику британского.I had a girlfriend. Her name

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I had a girlfriend. Her name is Daria. A terrible story happened to her.Once she went home one evening.She was pursued by a man.She once saw him behind her back, then a second time.She quickly ran into the house where her friend lived.She went to the apartment to a friend.She was all scared.From the window she saw this man again . Then she called the police. This story ended well, because the girl was not attacked.