Безотлагательно. Пожалуйста . Помогите написать сочинение на тему " Parents are

А что не так с ответом, который я кинул?

вроде бы 150 слов.

на тему Parents are the best teachers

Я ж произнесла не интернетное . http://www.seckinesen.com/blog-detay/toefl-essay-sample-1 отсюда я тож могу скопировать

так в чём неувязка?

Parents are the best teachers. Why?

So, our parents helped us with discovering our world when we were kids. They teached us how to speak, how to eat and a lot of simple things like that (36). Why are they the best teachers? Because they will never judge our knowledge, they will never give us any mark and i think that its really important.  Parents are most committed and involved in teaching their children, they have a kind of instinct to sacrifice a part of themselves for the betterment of their children (90).

To be honest, parents will never use boring student's book to teach their child, but the real teacher will. Parents's method of teaching is based on their own experience which helps us not to make their mistakes in our future. Parents teach us not how to count or how to read, but they teach us how to live our lives with less number of mistakes. (154)