Проверьте доклад!Не надобно писать, что у меня все правильно, поэтому что

Проверьте доклад!Не надо писать, что у меня все верно, поэтому что я уверенна что есть оплошности и такие ответы буду устранять!необходимо написать в формальном стиле)и еще:через переводчик я и сама в состоянии проверить!.
Introductions.The aim of this report is to suggest ways to improve the flats in which we live, to make them safer and more pleasant to live in.
2.Security.There is a risk that we would steal in their owapartments. Therefore, it would be advisable to install surveillance camras in the corridors and hallways. I am sure that be common efforts we will be able to collect the necessary funds to purchase them.
3.Fucilities. Firstly, I would strongly recommended to equip every room, Internet, so students can easily find the necessary information. Secondly, it wouldbe nice to allocate a room for living room, so we could go there and relax after a hard day, communicating with each other and plaing Board games. In addition, you can buy in every room, a small writing table.
4.General Environment. Unfortunately our rooms are badly lit and they already been overhaul. The wall should be painted ceiling whitewashed, you can hand a new chandelier with multiple light. Another proposal put more pots of flowers on the window-sills, so they were eye.
5.Conclusion. Overall, I believe that many will support me. I think that together we can make our room safer and more pleasant to stay.