Проверьте, пожалуйста, сочинение на британском:My dreams for the future of my

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My dreams for the future of my country
When Im thinking about future of my country and my future I cant say for sure what it will be like. First of all, I dream that War in my country will stop. I think, Ukrainians will realize that smoking tobacco, drinking alcohol, and using drugs are bad for their health. The healthy nation will grow in my country. My country will become cleaner if people protect the environment. People should participate in clearing up cities. Parks will be built instead of factories, and a lot of new forests will be planted. If we want to have the Future, we should take care of our Present! This is what I dream of, and I want to help my country I live in.
What about me, Im going to enter university after graduation from school. Of course I hope Ill have possibility to travel and to meet interesting people in future. I realize that the knowledge of the language is very important nowadays. So, I will also improve my command of English. I hope I will have enough time for my favourite music and my old friends. I cant imagine my future life without them.